If you can share any of that, I can give you a much more tailored critique.
Without the ability to view the actual video file, here is a detailed framework for how a professional review of such a project is conducted, covering key animation production pillars: Detailed Animation Review Framework Fatcat_-_2021_Panam_October_anim_version_2__Sep...
When reviewing a second iteration, the focus is strictly on: If you can share any of that, I
Evaluate if the animation conveys the intended message or narrative clearly. Fatcat_-_2021_Panam_October_anim_version_2__Sep...
If there are text elements, are they legible and properly animated (e.g., ease-in/ease-out)?
Does the aesthetic reflect the "October" aspect of the project (e.g., lighting, color mood)? 4. Motion Graphics and Composition